A few older kids said they saw her walking around the forest near the graveyard, but only if you summon her. Being twelve years old I even thought this was complete bullshit. So I grabbed two of my friends and we decided to walk to Waking Oaks and try to see little jumping Joan. The walk to Waking Oaks was long, but we saw a white owl perching on a branch, which was great. I had never seen one in the wild before.
Finally, we reached Waking Oaks graveyard. The entrance had an iron archway that was overgrown with vines and dead kudzu. We slowly walked around the graveyard to make sure there weren't any older gothic kids, but we were luckily alone. Most of the trees within Waking Oaks were almost dead. It is no exaggeration that every tree had multiple crows on its branches.
We read a few of the gravestones and some of them date back to the early 1800s. I think the earliest one we saw was being from 1819. Many of the gravestones had candles and bizarre marks drawn on them to where the creepy gothic kids would attempt to have seances. I wonder if that actually works, but I wouldn't want to be around if it does.
We finally found it, the gravestone of little jumping Joan. To be more respectful, her real name is Joan Clark. The grave stone read, "Our Dearest Daughter - Born 1876 : Died 1882." The grave gave us all the creeps to be honest. The three of us knew what to do next. The tradition is to stand in a circle in front of her grave and sing a song three times. Each time you sing the song it is supposed to be louder than the last. Kind of like "Bloody Mary," but inside a graveyard instead in front of a mirror.
The three of us joined hands and began to sing the song softly:
Here am I, little jumping Joan
HERE am I, little jumping Joan.
When nobody's with me,
I am always alone.
After the first time we sang the chant the wind started to pick up. I thought this was a little weird, but we continued to sing the song a second time. We sang louder this time. The wind began to blow even faster. Finally, we shouted the song a third time at the top of our lungs. Thunder and lightning crashed around us halfway through the third tune. We all looked at each other terrified, but never stopped singing. We sang the last line the loudest. Suddenly...nothing.
The wind, thunder, and lightning stopped. Actually, there was no noise at all. There was only silence. A silence I have never heard before. I couldn't even hear myself breathing. A few moments passed and we heard a faint sound of a young voice singing among the trees. The singing was quiet and eerie. It gave me chills to my core. The three of us looked into the trees to see who was singing. It was probably the older kids trying to scare us.
We turned back to the grave of little jumping Joan. A small bloody girl dressed in a school outfit sat on her grave.
"Have you come to jump and sing with me?" Joan asked quietly.
All of our eyes widened in fear. The three of us ran out of Waking Oaks screaming. I don't know where my two friends ran off to because of the terror. I continued to run down Burns road all the way home. Lets just say, I didn't leave my bedroom or sleep for days.
Author's Note:
For the unit this week I read Nursery Rhymes. I chose to use the paradox of the "Little Jumping Joan" as the reference to the readings. I don't know why I decided to make it a horror story within a graveyard. I haven't written a story that was meant to be scary yet so I figured that I would give that a try. I decided to make the paradox a song, which the three young kids sang in the graveyard. I just thought that the original paradox/poem could be used in a creepy way if it was sung.
Lang, Andrew. The Nursery Rhyme Book Book (1897)
I thought that turning this nursery rhyme into a scary story was great! Almost everyone has their own scary story situation to tell and your story brought back memories of my own. I remember going/playing in an old graveyard with my cousins and telling scary stories and trying to see ghosts. I think you did a fantastic job with this retelling. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI love your version of the story. I have never read the original but I did like how you set it to a ghost story. Your story was easy to read and it flowed really well. I like how you set the scene with the back story for the little girl. I think making this a scary story was a great idea and I really liked it.
ReplyDeleteYou did a fantastic job "painting" the scenery! It was very enjoyable going through the story just for the way you make each scene very visual and tangible. The pacing was also very well done: you've learned from your previous writing experiences and made quite a build up! The only critical suggestion I have would be to maybe pick an ending that's more unique: I just didn't feel fulfilled with that ending. Other than that, fantastic work!
ReplyDeleteHey Matt! I thought turning the nursery rhyme into a scary story was a great idea! Your story seems really realistic and believable, which helps it seem even more terrifying. I think you did a great job setting up the scene and really drawing the reader into the story, and I could picture it in my mind really well. The only thing I noticed was that you were missing a few commas here and there, but it wasn’t anything major. Awesome job!
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