As the sun begins to set in the west and traffic slows, the two prairie dogs decide to retreat to their borrows just a little over a mile away. However, something happened this day that has never occurred in the past. The small brother comes across his shadow. Normally he doesn't think anything of his shadow, but his desire to be larger this day was greater than it was in the past. The prairie dog dances with his shadow and exclaims how large he appears. His bigger brother laughs and continues to walk to their borrows.
The prairie dog shouts proudly, "I look larger than any prairie dog in the plains! I'm sure if I ran onto the highway a car will see how big I am and stop to let me pass!" His larger brother stares at him puzzled and confused as to why he thinks this. Suddenly, the small prairie dog runs through the grass to the edge of the highway. His brother laughs thinking he is only trying to show off his newly found bravery. A tiny truck can be seen on the horizon. The small brother slowly walks to the middle of the highway. He stands up tall and waits as the truck grows near. The once small truck is now suddenly a large sixteen wheeler. The small prairie dog begins to dance and cheer in front of the truck. His shadow, appearing only three times his size, mimics his actions. The truck honks its horn and merely hits a speed bump.
As the sun rises the next morning on interstate sixty-five, the large prairie dog watches traffic alone.
Photo of Prairie Dogs
Author's Note:
I wrote this story as an adaption of The Wolf and His Shadow taken from Aesop (Winter): Page 5. In the original story, the wolf becomes overwhelmed by the size of his shadow and believes he can frighten a lion. However, the lion is not intimidated by the wolf's shadow and actually kills him. This is similar to the small prairie dog as he finally feels as if he is larger than he seems. In correlation to the original story, he "fancies" his large shadow and forgets the reality that he cannot actually stop a fast moving vehicle. I wanted to maintain the "fable style," but also wanted to modernize the concept. That is why I chose to use highway traffic as a main element to the story. I am not exactly sure why I used prairie dogs in my story as they are not a very common animal in storytelling. Well not a common animal used in stories I have read at least. I started writing the story with two raccoons, but it just didn't sound right when I read the story to myself. Overall, I enjoyed writing the story and the title was definitely the hardest part to think of. I am not sure how I thought to make a play off of the "Little House on the Prairie," but it was the last thing I did before publishing the blog post.
Winter, Milo. The Aesop for Children (1919)
"The Wolf and His Shadow"
Winter, Milo. The Aesop for Children (1919)
"The Wolf and His Shadow"
This was a VERY original take on the original story. I especially liked the title very puny! The picture was perfect (how great that you were able to find it). I was a bit saddened by the ending. Describing the little guy as a speed bump just broke my heart. The large prairie dog watching traffic alone the next morning was the nail in the coffin. Great little story :)
ReplyDeleteYeah, I did not see that ending coming haha. Good example of what trying to be something you are not can do to you. The little guy was so confident that his size could change things, but in the end we all remember that ground hogs will always remain road kill. Good modern interpretation of the original story.
ReplyDeleteFirstly, just because my one friend is from Indiana, I would like to state that this story is factually inaccurate--there are no prairie dogs along I-65, haha. But loved this story regardless. :)
ReplyDeleteTo start off, you might want to consider putting more space between each of your paragraphs. The spaces give readers a short respite and aid the tale in appearing to move faster. Also, your paragraphs here are relatively short, but be careful with the length; if any of them got another couple of sentences longer, they would seem like impenetrable blocks of text and the reader may zone out of the story.
As far as your image goes, the choice was perfect. What with all of the imagery in the tale with one large and one small prairie dog, the perfectly matched photo aided in depicting the scene. However, if might have been more effective if the photo was placed either at the top of the story or someplace in the middle, rather than as an afterthought at the end.
You might also want to think about changing some of the design/layout of your blog. It is quite plain, and though the simple design is very utilitarian, it might add to the atmosphere of your blog if it was somewhat more colorful or configured.
In any case, great work!
First, I'd put spaces between your paragraphs. Even though you indent each one, it still looks (to me at least) like an intimidating block of text, which makes me less inclined to read it. Second, your blog format is pretty boring. Honestly, mine isn't any better, so let's both make our blogs more interesting to look at. As Jessica said above, it's utilitarian, which is sometimes useful. However, since you're writing stories and discussing mythology, I think that you ought to change it a bit to fir the mystical nature of the topic at hand.
ReplyDeleteHowever, the content is more important than the formatting, so let me say that your story was a great original take. I appreciate how you didn't overly dramatize the death. That is a problem (I think) that many modern authors run into. You (more true to what Aesop does) just showed us what happened rather than lamenting over death.
WOW! That was a plot twist. I like how you gave background information on your characters. That is something that I have been wanting to work on more in my writing. I have a hard time being very detailed. My personality is somewhat blunt. I agree with Jack Thomas about putting spaces between your paragraphs. That makes it a little easier for the reader. I like that I did not see the ending coming so that was great. The picture you found was perfect for your story. Keep up the good work and everyone else has given you great feedback.
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